Changes between Version 7 and Version 8 of content/Story

Timestamp:

Apr 26, 2012, 4:29:41 PM (12 years ago)

Author:

bknecht

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content/Story

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 The structure of the Story is pretty loose at the moment. Things written on this page will be put onto different pages and into designated chapters once they're thought out properly and reach a riper state.
 
-== Tutorial-Level ==
-The Story starts around Jupiter. The player (insert player name here) arrives in the Jupiter orbit with his pilot steering the ship during the interplanetary travel from Earth to Jupiter. The purpose of the travel is business. The player is working for an engineering company which built a new technology to improve the gas miners. This would be the first test of the prototype under realistic circumstances and in the environment the final product will be used in. The customer is RedGas.
+== Tutorial-Level (Arrival) ==
+The story starts around Jupiter. The player (''insert player name here'') arrives in the Jupiter space with his pilot steering the ship during the interplanetary travel from Earth to Jupiter. The purpose of the travel is business. The player is working for a small engineering company which built a special particle beam to improve gas mining. This would be the first test of the new technology under realistic circumstances and in the environment the final product will be used in. The customer is [wiki:RGC RedGas] one of the big gas mining companies.
 
-Upon arrival the auto-pilot which assists during interplanetary flights switches into a less restricted state and allows the pilot to navigate freely in a planets orbit. While the pilot of the ship checks the systems, the player is advised to test if the navigation works. This is where the tutorial kicks in and explains the player how to steer the ship.
+Upon arrival the auto-pilot which assists during interplanetary flights is switched into a less restrictive state and the pilot navigates into a stable orbit around Jupiter. While the pilot checks the systems, the player is advised to test if the navigation works properly. This is where the tutorial kicks in and the player will learn how to steer the ship.
 
-The pilot would then give green light with the navigation system and advises you to fly to the meeting point. Since the new mining technology was too large for a normal ship, it was brought with a small transporter with which the player is going to meet next.
+The pilot would then give green light with the navigation system and advises you to fly to the meeting point with the transporter that carries the particle beam generator. For security reasons the technology was brought to Jupiter using two separate ships. The player's ship is much smaller, but carries small and crucial parts of the particle beam. The two ships meet up in Jupiter's orbit before they meet the customer.
 
-During the flight to the meeting point the player receives a distress call from the transporter. The pilot enables the weapon systems and the player helps the transporter to get rid of a couple of pirate ships that wanted to steal the technology. The pirates either get destroyed or flee, while one of the pirates may drop a pick up, which will help the player to understand the pick-up system.
+During the flight to the meeting point the player receives a distress call from the transporter. The pilot enables the weapon systems and the player helps the transporter to get rid of a couple of pirates who wanted to check the transporter for valuables. The pirates either get destroyed or flee, while one of the pirates may drop a pick up, which will help the player to learn about the pick-up system.
 
 The transporter and the player will then join up in a formation (advanced flight training) and fly to a space station of the RedGas corporation and dock.
 
-This will end the tutorial level.
+This will end the first tutorial level.
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+=== Intermission ===
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+The player meets up with his contact at RGC and they receive some information about what is going on in the system. Especially the rivalry between GEP and RGC is an important topic. The ever present nuisance of pirates is mentioned as well as their ability to infiltrate space stations of the RGC and the GEP. After a drink and some bureaucracy the player will go back to the ship with his RGC contact and the pilots.
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+== Main Mission (Surfing Jupiter) ==
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+The journey will lead the player's space ship and the transporter to one of the new gas miners above Jupiter's atmosphere. There is also some security in form of additional fighters accompanying the player. The player will learn more about how to use orbits of different heights above the planet's surface. Once arriving on the lowest orbit the miner comes into sight and the player ones again learns how to dock.
 
 == Story Outline - Jupiter (Chapter 1) ==
 
-The protagonist controlled by the player arrives in the Jupiter system through his work as an engineer of a small company that specialized on gas mining technology. The company has a contract with [wiki:GEP Ganymede Energy Provision (GEP)] and the player is to deliver a new radiation emitter with which the fuel production can be significantly increased.
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-On arrival the player can barely avoid to lose the emitter to a couple of pirates. The emitter is then tested with one of the newer GEP gas miners. During the test that first looks very promising, a major attacks by pirates occurs and the crew of the gas miner is forced to abandon ship. The protagonist survives this attack as well and can save himself/herself, but the gas miner with the emitter seems to have fallen into the pirates' hands.
+During the test that first looks very promising, a major attacks by pirates occurs and the crew of the gas miner is forced to abandon ship. The protagonist survives this attack as well and can save himself/herself, but the gas miner with the emitter seems to have fallen into the pirates' hands.
 
 The incident raises a lot of question from GEP and the protagonist's company. Because of this the protagonist gets fired and has to find a new job as freelancer. GEP starts to investigate the matter on its own and starts to increase its spying efforts on [wiki:RGC RedGas Corporation (RGC)] their rival and main suspect for the attack.